I am grateful to Deane Galbraithe for his generous list of posts at PoC in the BS Carnival 69. There are in his list of blogs a huge number that I am not looking at - I wonder how to manage them. I have not been reading much recently - too much collecting and purging (of my own notes) and testing internal structures for the Psalms. Next there is going to be the music project - I doubt that that qualifies as Biblical Studies.
PoC has 10 posts scheduled for next month too. And they have all been revised since they were first scheduled. I am trying to find beautiful or convincing diagrams for each psalm. Some sections of the poems have very low recurrence - like maybe one word in 7 verses - but those verses connect very strongly to the rest of the poem - my thesis is that the poet is thinking in a larger block - i.e. 2 and 3 won't work as an organizing principle. 8, 10, 12 even 19 verse segments seem possible when recurrence is considered.
Probably I need another technique and another life to consider this question.
For there is a language of flowers
for flowers are peculiarly, the poetry of Christ (Christopher Smart)
א ב ג ד ה ו ז ח ט י כ ל מ נ ס ע פ צ ק ר ש ת
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Wednesday, 30 November 2011
Tuesday, 29 November 2011
Hearing the Psalter - an outline of the Grand Opera
The final result of the bulk of the Psalter is this note- this new song:
Here then is the beginning of a draft of the Grand Opera known as the Psalter. (Links to music are on the right panel.)
First Act - David the Beloved, Book 1
Scene 1: Introduction (1-2) -
Ps 1 F+ A rising third and descending fifth motif for the 'Happy are' phrases - to be used whenever they recur at the seams and conclusions of the Psalter. A triple rhythm (hidden in this case in 4/4) that signifies the voice of the Most High.; angular diminished fifths as structural gates and as a tossed away motif.
Ps 2 F- (D-flat+) A lament motif - augmented descending fifth - recurs in various voices throughout the Psalter. Triple rhythm descending major 7th as well as high recitation on a single note for proclamation. Descending minor seconds for the derision. Rapid-fire 16th notes wrapping tenderness.
Scene 2: Prayer (3-6), problem (7), solution (8), celebration (9-10)
Ps 3-6 sequence in D+ upper minor third and lower major third separately then combined, then D- for lament. - the leit-motifs to be extended as the song develops.
Remainder of scenes in draft form... Note I am organizing the scenes using the acrostics in Books 1 and 5. I think that there are 4 is significant - copying perhaps the 4 in Lamentations and recognizing thereby the exile as a critical aspect of all human experience.
Scene 3: Restating the problem (12-15), leading to instruction (16-19), the king (20-24), celebration (25)
Scene 4: 26-34, Reprise (26), ? (27-30), ? (31-33), celebration (34)
Scene 5: Oracle and celebration (36-37)
Entr'acte: 38-41
Second Act - Surrounding the harvest
Part 1 Book 2
Scene 1: Korah (42-49)
Scene 2: Asaph (50 in front of the curtain)
Scene 3: David (51-64)
Scene 4: Harvest (65-67)
Scene 5: David (68-70)
Scene 6: Solo (71), Solomon (72)
Part 2 Book 3
Scene 7: Asaph (73-83)
Scene 8: Korah + (84-88)
Entr'acte: Lament 89
Third Act - Book 4 Moses
Scene 1: Moses and response (90-92), Rivers and judgment (93-94), Warning (95)
Scene 2: יְהוָה's reign (96-100)
Scene 3: David and renewal (101-103)
Entr'acte: Creation and redemption (104-106)
Fourth Act - Book 5
Scene 1: Predicament (107), redemption (108-110), celebration (111-112)
Scene 2: Praise and adoration (113-117), salvation (118), celebration (119)
Scene 3: Ascent (120-134), Arrival (135)
Scene 4: Creation and redemption (136)
Scene 5: Exile (137)
Scene 6: Recapitulation of David, Holy of Holies (138-139) Prayer of the anointed king on behalf of all (140-144), celebration (145)
Coda: 146-150
אֱלֹהִים שִׁיר חָדָשׁ אָשִׁירָה לָּךְ בְּנֵבֶל עָשׂוֹר אֲזַמְּרָה לָּךְ | 144.9 | O God, a song that is new I will sing to you on lute, a tenth I will sing a psalm to you |
הַנּוֹתֵן תְּשׁוּעָה לַמְּלָכִים הַפּוֹצֶה אֶת דָּוִד עַבְדּוֹ מֵחֶרֶב רָעָה | 10 | giving salvation to kings setting even David his servant free from a sword of evil |
First Act - David the Beloved, Book 1
Scene 1: Introduction (1-2) -
Ps 1 F+ A rising third and descending fifth motif for the 'Happy are' phrases - to be used whenever they recur at the seams and conclusions of the Psalter. A triple rhythm (hidden in this case in 4/4) that signifies the voice of the Most High.; angular diminished fifths as structural gates and as a tossed away motif.
Ps 2 F- (D-flat+) A lament motif - augmented descending fifth - recurs in various voices throughout the Psalter. Triple rhythm descending major 7th as well as high recitation on a single note for proclamation. Descending minor seconds for the derision. Rapid-fire 16th notes wrapping tenderness.
Scene 2: Prayer (3-6), problem (7), solution (8), celebration (9-10)
Ps 3-6 sequence in D+ upper minor third and lower major third separately then combined, then D- for lament. - the leit-motifs to be extended as the song develops.
Remainder of scenes in draft form... Note I am organizing the scenes using the acrostics in Books 1 and 5. I think that there are 4 is significant - copying perhaps the 4 in Lamentations and recognizing thereby the exile as a critical aspect of all human experience.
Scene 3: Restating the problem (12-15), leading to instruction (16-19), the king (20-24), celebration (25)
Scene 4: 26-34, Reprise (26), ? (27-30), ? (31-33), celebration (34)
Scene 5: Oracle and celebration (36-37)
Entr'acte: 38-41
Second Act - Surrounding the harvest
Part 1 Book 2
Scene 1: Korah (42-49)
Scene 2: Asaph (50 in front of the curtain)
Scene 3: David (51-64)
Scene 4: Harvest (65-67)
Scene 5: David (68-70)
Scene 6: Solo (71), Solomon (72)
Part 2 Book 3
Scene 7: Asaph (73-83)
Scene 8: Korah + (84-88)
Entr'acte: Lament 89
Third Act - Book 4 Moses
Scene 1: Moses and response (90-92), Rivers and judgment (93-94), Warning (95)
Scene 2: יְהוָה's reign (96-100)
Scene 3: David and renewal (101-103)
Entr'acte: Creation and redemption (104-106)
Fourth Act - Book 5
Scene 1: Predicament (107), redemption (108-110), celebration (111-112)
Scene 2: Praise and adoration (113-117), salvation (118), celebration (119)
Scene 3: Ascent (120-134), Arrival (135)
Scene 4: Creation and redemption (136)
Scene 5: Exile (137)
Scene 6: Recapitulation of David, Holy of Holies (138-139) Prayer of the anointed king on behalf of all (140-144), celebration (145)
Coda: 146-150
Sunday, 27 November 2011
Do you see any patterns?
Here are the words used in the Songs of Ascent more than once in the 15 psalms. (organized in order by count 2 to 15) I don't see much in the way of coherence internally. I suspect the collection has external references rather than internal.
Root | 120 | 121 | 122 | 123 | 124 | 125 | 126 | 127 | 128 | 129 | 130 | 131 | 132 | 133 | 134 |
אדני | X | X | |||||||||||||
אהל | X | X | |||||||||||||
אז | X | X | |||||||||||||
אח | X | X | |||||||||||||
איב | X | X | |||||||||||||
אכל | X | X | |||||||||||||
בטן | X | X | |||||||||||||
בנה | X | X | |||||||||||||
גדל | X | X | |||||||||||||
חנן | X | X | |||||||||||||
חסד | X | X | |||||||||||||
חץ | X | X | |||||||||||||
יחד | X | X | |||||||||||||
יחל | X | X | |||||||||||||
ירא | X | X | |||||||||||||
כסא | X | X | |||||||||||||
כף | X | X | |||||||||||||
לב | X | X | |||||||||||||
לילה | X | X | |||||||||||||
לשׁון | X | X | |||||||||||||
מה | X | X | |||||||||||||
מוט | X | X | |||||||||||||
מן | X | X | |||||||||||||
משׁך | X | X | |||||||||||||
נוח | X | X | |||||||||||||
נום | X | X | |||||||||||||
נער | X | X | |||||||||||||
סבב | X | X | |||||||||||||
עבר | X | X | |||||||||||||
עדה | X | X | |||||||||||||
עזר | X | X | |||||||||||||
עיר | X | X | |||||||||||||
עלה | X | X | |||||||||||||
צדיק | X | X | |||||||||||||
קצר | X | X | |||||||||||||
קרא | X | X | |||||||||||||
רנן | X | X | |||||||||||||
רשׁע | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׁבט | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׁוב | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׁכן | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׁלא | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׁלח | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׁמע | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׁער | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׂבע | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׂמח | X | X | |||||||||||||
שׂנא | X | X | |||||||||||||
ארץ | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
אשׁר | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
בוא | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
בושׁ | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
בן | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
גם | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
הלך | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
הר | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
חיה | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
ילך | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
ירושׁלם | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
ישׁן | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
כן | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
לחם | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
לי | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
למען | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
מלא | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
נא | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
עבד | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
עמד | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
ענה | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
עתה | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
פה | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
פרי | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
קום | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
רגל | X | X | X | ||||||||||||
אם | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
אמר | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
גבר | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
דבר | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
טוב | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
לה | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
לך | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
נשׂא | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
עין | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
עלם | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
עשׂה | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
רבה | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
שׁמים | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
שׁמר | X | X | X | X | |||||||||||
בית | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||||
היה | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||||
יד | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||||
נתן | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||||
עם | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||||
שׁלם | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||||
שׁם | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||||
ברך | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||||
דוד | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||||
ישׁב | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||||
כל | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||||
לא | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||||
נפשׁ | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||||
עד | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||||
הנה | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||
ציון | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | ||||||||
ישׂראל | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | |||||||
מעלה | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X |
שׁיר | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X | X |
Saturday, 26 November 2011
Now for something quite different
Busking - just kidding - not like David Ker in Africa somewhere. But here I am making music - you can't just see the psalms, you've gotta hear them too. So here's the sheet music that I wrote this week for Psalms 1, 2, and 3 - and will I dare - or more to the point, can I remember how to record it?
Oh - I remember - but there are a few hard notes to hit! I think it is easier in Psalm 1 to sing the E-flat major triad at the end if the nor is an A-flat. So let the variations begin!
In Psalm 2 there are likewise some tricky key-changes.
Psalm 3 with the other two show the beginning of the extent of chant music to map structure. (Psalm 4 and 5 will continue in D+ with Psalm 6 finding a minor key yet to be decided. I will be outlining the musical plan ... some day.)
Here they are - performance as I thought it might be - not note or word perfect but close - meant to be freely sung anyway. Probably could be mapped to other translations if they are close enough to the Hebrew. Performance links here: Psalms 1, 2, and 3.
If all goes well over the next two years, I will set all 42000 words of my translation. One thing surely it will do is to help me verify them rhythmically.
Any ideas for accompaniment? If you are a musician I can send you the .mscz files for experimentation.
Oh - I remember - but there are a few hard notes to hit! I think it is easier in Psalm 1 to sing the E-flat major triad at the end if the nor is an A-flat. So let the variations begin!
In Psalm 2 there are likewise some tricky key-changes.
Psalm 3 with the other two show the beginning of the extent of chant music to map structure. (Psalm 4 and 5 will continue in D+ with Psalm 6 finding a minor key yet to be decided. I will be outlining the musical plan ... some day.)
Here they are - performance as I thought it might be - not note or word perfect but close - meant to be freely sung anyway. Probably could be mapped to other translations if they are close enough to the Hebrew. Performance links here: Psalms 1, 2, and 3.
If all goes well over the next two years, I will set all 42000 words of my translation. One thing surely it will do is to help me verify them rhythmically.
Any ideas for accompaniment? If you are a musician I can send you the .mscz files for experimentation.
Monday, 21 November 2011
Psalm 1 and 26
I made a comment months ago on Poetry of Christ that Psalms 26 and 1 were closely related. Here is the pattern of word usage between the two of them. Psalm 26 opens with the request for judgment. Psalm 1 ends with being able to stand in such. Do you think the poet was reading Psalm 1 as he composed Psalm 26?
Selected words occurring in each of psalms --1,-26
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 10 | Vs | Stem |
* אשׁרי happy | ░ | --1.1 | אשׁר | |||||||||
* אשׁר who | ░ | --1.1 | אשׁר | |||||||||
* לא does not | ░ | --1.1 | לא | |||||||||
הלך walk | ░ | --1.1 | הלך | |||||||||
* רשׁעים the wicked | ░ | --1.1 | רשׁע | |||||||||
* חטאים sinners | ░ | --1.1 | חטא | |||||||||
* לא does not | ░ | --1.1 | לא | |||||||||
עמד stand | ░ | --1.1 | עמד | |||||||||
* ובמושׁב and in the seat of | ░ | --1.1 | ישׁב | |||||||||
* לא does not | ░ | --1.1 | לא | |||||||||
* ישׁב sit | ░ | --1.1 | ישׁב | |||||||||
* אשׁר that | ░ | --1.3 | אשׁר | |||||||||
* לא does not | ░ | --1.3 | לא | |||||||||
וכל and in all | ░ | --1.3 | כל | |||||||||
* אשׁר that | ░ | --1.3 | אשׁר | |||||||||
* לא not | ░ | --1.4 | לא | |||||||||
* הרשׁעים the-many wicked | ░ | --1.4 | רשׁע | |||||||||
* אשׁר that | ░ | --1.4 | אשׁר | |||||||||
* לא they will not | ░ | --1.5 | לא | |||||||||
יקמו arise | ░ | --1.5 | קום | |||||||||
* רשׁעים the wicked | ░ | --1.5 | רשׁע | |||||||||
במשׁפט in the judgment | ░ | --1.5 | שׁפט | |||||||||
* וחטאים nor sinners | ░ | --1.5 | חטא | |||||||||
* רשׁעים those wicked | ░ | --1.6 | רשׁע | |||||||||
שׁפטני judge me | ░ | -26.1 | שׁפט | |||||||||
* הלכתי have walked | ░ | -26.1 | הלך | |||||||||
לא -- | ░ | -26.1 | לא | |||||||||
* והתהלכתי and I have walked | ░ | -26.3 | הלך | |||||||||
לא not | ░ | -26.4 | לא | |||||||||
ישׁבתי I have sat | ░ | -26.4 | ישׁב | |||||||||
לא not | ░ | -26.4 | לא | |||||||||
רשׁעים the wicked | ░ | -26.5 | רשׁע | |||||||||
לא not | ░ | -26.5 | לא | |||||||||
אשׁב I will sit | ░ | -26.5 | ישׁב | |||||||||
כל all | ░ | -26.7 | כל | |||||||||
ומקום and the -place of | ░ | -26.8 | קום | |||||||||
חטאים sinners | ░ | -26.9 | חטא | |||||||||
אשׁר whose | ░ | -26.10 | אשׁר | |||||||||
עמדה stands | ░ | -26.12 | עמד |
Thursday, 10 November 2011
Psalm 1 - illustration of my new approach
Here ye! Hear ye! Extra! Extra! הנה Hey! הנה Behold!
This post illustrates how I am developing my visual structures in the Psalter. One year after the Psalms conference in Oxford, when I had just completed a first complete marathon (for me) read of the Hebrew Psalter in 2 months, I am now ready to focus on seeing - and hopefully eliminate the tendency to blather on aboutirrelevancies. If you would like to see the private work as it appears and as I work through each psalm again in sequence, drop me a comment or send me an email [bobmacdonald at gx.ca] and I will let you know where the readable pre-publication ms is.
I find I write differently for paper than for the web. The design problems are different and there is a need for frequent revision and editing. Also - it's the-whites-of-their-eyes issue. The whole will emerge when I am given enough time. It will represent all the visual aspects of seeing the psalms that I discover - but with as little commentary as I can manage.
I am still posting notes at Poetry of Christ. They are more commentary than visual, but they will morph into more visual for the last 50-odd posts scheduled there to March 31, 2012. That blog illustrates why blogs are unsuitable for real writing. So does this one. I have revised all those translations from 2010 by the hundredsthousands. That's not blogging. They hardly have any of the original post left - a few bits and pieces if I want to illustrate some day how writing develops.
Now if you want to help, here's what I need. One or two persons willing to point out mistakes and unnecessary comment. And clarity of focus - when am I ambiguous or confusing? Matters of taste or gloss we might not agree on. And of theology, I hope to say little but let the text speak for itself. Also I don't think I am discovering magic - but rather the work of human poets and redactors with a devoted purpose. What I see must have been possible for them to see before and as they created the poems in their present form.
So I think the Psalter was deliberately constructed in the form I see it in, and I think it was perfectly possible for editors and writers to do such a thing as a response within their ordinary-extraordinary lives. There were great poets among them. Children also - Psalm 114 is the work of a young genius. Perhaps great musicians too. Psalm 89, on the demise of the Davidic monarchy, is like the Chaconne in D Minor, on the death of Bach's first wife. And Symphony? Psalm 78, Brahms, Psalm 84 later Mozart, 86 early Mozart, Psalm 90-91 The Art of the Fugue. 139 Bairstow, I sat down. I am getting carried away
What the Hilliard ensemble did with the Chaconne is illustrative of what I would like to hear in the text of the Psalter, the inner joins and the cantus firmus.
This post illustrates how I am developing my visual structures in the Psalter. One year after the Psalms conference in Oxford, when I had just completed a first complete marathon (for me) read of the Hebrew Psalter in 2 months, I am now ready to focus on seeing - and hopefully eliminate the tendency to blather on about
I find I write differently for paper than for the web. The design problems are different and there is a need for frequent revision and editing. Also - it's the-whites-of-their-eyes issue. The whole will emerge when I am given enough time. It will represent all the visual aspects of seeing the psalms that I discover - but with as little commentary as I can manage.
Now if you want to help, here's what I need. One or two persons willing to point out mistakes and unnecessary comment. And clarity of focus - when am I ambiguous or confusing? Matters of taste or gloss we might not agree on. And of theology, I hope to say little but let the text speak for itself. Also I don't think I am discovering magic - but rather the work of human poets and redactors with a devoted purpose. What I see must have been possible for them to see before and as they created the poems in their present form.
So I think the Psalter was deliberately constructed in the form I see it in, and I think it was perfectly possible for editors and writers to do such a thing as a response within their ordinary-extraordinary lives. There were great poets among them. Children also - Psalm 114 is the work of a young genius. Perhaps great musicians too. Psalm 89, on the demise of the Davidic monarchy, is like the Chaconne in D Minor, on the death of Bach's first wife. And Symphony? Psalm 78, Brahms, Psalm 84 later Mozart, 86 early Mozart, Psalm 90-91 The Art of the Fugue. 139 Bairstow, I sat down. I am getting carried away
What the Hilliard ensemble did with the Chaconne is illustrative of what I would like to hear in the text of the Psalter, the inner joins and the cantus firmus.
Seeing the Psalter - Psalm 1
Introducing the technique.
How do we read? How do we hear or see what we are reading? I will illustrate three techniques: Recurrence, Parallelism, and Prosody. They help see what is in the text.
Recurrence is the use of repeated words in the text. Following the text of each psalm, there are tables showing the patterns of the words that repeat. The patterns focus the sections of the psalm and help identify the thought of the one who constructed the text.
Distinguish parallelism and recurrence from each other. Parallelism is the expression of the same (or an antithetical) thought in different words. Recurrence is the repetition of the same word in the poem. This distinction removes some subjectivity from initial structural considerations. We will usually agree when two words have the same root letters. We may not agree that two concepts having differing letters in the poem represent a similar or contrasting thought.
Prosody: Prosody is the art of displaying poetry. In the case of Hebrew poetry, a starting point is to see the lines of a poem in twos and threes.
Here is Psalm 1 verse 1. This small example illustrates all three techniques.
Note the three lines that modify the happy individual. They are all in parallel with each other with a cumulative effect. They are each organized around three main words. A recurring motif is the word “not”!
Parallelism: notice how the parallel phrases vary in conceptual order dividing each line in two: in this case, a, the action, and b where. These parallels are in the form a-b, then b-a, b-a. These are an example of rhyming ideas created with different words, walk -- sit -- stand; and wicked -- sinners -- scornful, and advice -- way -- seat.
Prosody: notice in the Hebrew that there are (apart from relative pronoun and negative particle) literally three words in each of the three lines. It is clear in English also. In the Hebrew below, I have underlined the roots of these “main words”. The other letters in a typical Hebrew word are prepositions, pronouns, verb forms, and so on. If you don’t read Hebrew, just look for the moment.
Notice that as there are three main words in the English so there are three underlined parts in the Hebrew corresponding to the three main English words per line. The underlined parts are the 'roots' of the Hebrew words.
Recurrence: The bold words are those that recur, in this case the recurring no.
A second example: Here is a miniature table showing the last two verses of Psalm 1.
The table shows the recurring words for verses 5 and 6. There are three of them: wicked -- righteous -- way. The numbered columns (1, 2, 3) represent the words in the sequence they occur in the poem, and the boxes in the grid show the pattern of their usage. The word itself and its gloss is in the left hand column. This column (*) also tells us if this is the first time the word has been used as a keyword in the Psalter. The verse numbers are in the second to last right hand column (Vs). The root of the word or where there is no root, the combination of prepositions and pronouns is in the right hand column (Root).
In this small table, we can see that wicked appears first and last in the table. An inner pair of words: righteous and way, recur in sequence. Wicked effectively 'frames' the two verses. A 'frame' is a word or set of words that recurs, effectively surrounding a text and highlighting it. It is similar to a picture frame in a gallery which sets off the picture for the viewer. This idea of framing is also expressed by other words in English: circling, enveloping, and including (via the Latin phrase inclusio).
Before continuing with the shapes to observe in the tables, first read and ponder Psalm 1. As you read, circle the words that recur.
How do we read? How do we hear or see what we are reading? I will illustrate three techniques: Recurrence, Parallelism, and Prosody. They help see what is in the text.
Recurrence is the use of repeated words in the text. Following the text of each psalm, there are tables showing the patterns of the words that repeat. The patterns focus the sections of the psalm and help identify the thought of the one who constructed the text.
Distinguish parallelism and recurrence from each other. Parallelism is the expression of the same (or an antithetical) thought in different words. Recurrence is the repetition of the same word in the poem. This distinction removes some subjectivity from initial structural considerations. We will usually agree when two words have the same root letters. We may not agree that two concepts having differing letters in the poem represent a similar or contrasting thought.
Prosody: Prosody is the art of displaying poetry. In the case of Hebrew poetry, a starting point is to see the lines of a poem in twos and threes.
Here is Psalm 1 verse 1. This small example illustrates all three techniques.
Note the three lines that modify the happy individual. They are all in parallel with each other with a cumulative effect. They are each organized around three main words. A recurring motif is the word “not”!
who does not walk in the advice of the wicked
and in the way of sinners does not stand
and in the seat of the scornful does not sit
and in the way of sinners does not stand
and in the seat of the scornful does not sit
Parallelism: notice how the parallel phrases vary in conceptual order dividing each line in two: in this case, a, the action, and b where. These parallels are in the form a-b, then b-a, b-a. These are an example of rhyming ideas created with different words, walk -- sit -- stand; and wicked -- sinners -- scornful, and advice -- way -- seat.
Prosody: notice in the Hebrew that there are (apart from relative pronoun and negative particle) literally three words in each of the three lines. It is clear in English also. In the Hebrew below, I have underlined the roots of these “main words”. The other letters in a typical Hebrew word are prepositions, pronouns, verb forms, and so on. If you don’t read Hebrew, just look for the moment.
אֲשֶׁר לֹא הָלַךְ בַּעֲצַת רְשָׁעִים
וּבְדֶרֶךְ חַטָּאִים לֹא עָמָד
וּבְמוֹשַׁב לֵצִים לֹא יָשָׁב
וּבְדֶרֶךְ חַטָּאִים לֹא עָמָד
וּבְמוֹשַׁב לֵצִים לֹא יָשָׁב
Notice that as there are three main words in the English so there are three underlined parts in the Hebrew corresponding to the three main English words per line. The underlined parts are the 'roots' of the Hebrew words.
Recurrence: The bold words are those that recur, in this case the recurring no.
A second example: Here is a miniature table showing the last two verses of Psalm 1.
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | Vs | Root |
* רשׁעים the wicked
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* צדיקים the-many righteous
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| 5 | צדיק | ||
* דרך the way of
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| 6 | דרך | ||
* צדיקים those righteous
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| 6 | צדיק | ||
* ודרך but the way of
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| 6 | דרך | ||
* רשׁעים those wicked
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| 6 | רשׁע |
The table shows the recurring words for verses 5 and 6. There are three of them: wicked -- righteous -- way. The numbered columns (1, 2, 3) represent the words in the sequence they occur in the poem, and the boxes in the grid show the pattern of their usage. The word itself and its gloss is in the left hand column. This column (*) also tells us if this is the first time the word has been used as a keyword in the Psalter. The verse numbers are in the second to last right hand column (Vs). The root of the word or where there is no root, the combination of prepositions and pronouns is in the right hand column (Root).
In this small table, we can see that wicked appears first and last in the table. An inner pair of words: righteous and way, recur in sequence. Wicked effectively 'frames' the two verses. A 'frame' is a word or set of words that recurs, effectively surrounding a text and highlighting it. It is similar to a picture frame in a gallery which sets off the picture for the viewer. This idea of framing is also expressed by other words in English: circling, enveloping, and including (via the Latin phrase inclusio).
Before continuing with the shapes to observe in the tables, first read and ponder Psalm 1. As you read, circle the words that recur.
Psalm 1 - The way of the wicked and the righteous
אַשְׁרֵי הָאִישׁ
אֲשֶׁר לֹא הָלַךְ בַּעֲצַת רְשָׁעִים וּבְדֶרֶךְ חַטָּאִים לֹא עָמָד וּבְמוֹשַׁב לֵצִים לֹא יָשָׁב | 1 | Happy the person who does not walk in the advice of the wicked and in the way of sinners does not stand and in the seat of the scornful does not sit |
כִּי אִם בְּתוֹרַת יְהוָה חֶפְצוֹ
וּבְתוֹרָתוֹ יֶהְגֶּה יוֹמָם וָלָיְלָה | 2 | In contrast: in the instruction of יְהוָה is his delight and in his instruction he mutters day and night |
וְהָיָה כְּעֵץ
שָׁתוּל עַל פַּלְגֵי מָיִם אֲשֶׁר פִּרְיוֹ יִתֵּן בְּעִתּוֹ וְעָלֵהוּ לֹא יִבּוֹל וְכֹל אֲשֶׁר יַעֲשֶׂה יַצְלִיחַ | 3 | and that one will be like a tree transplanted by streams of water that gives its fruit in its time and its leaf does not wither and in all that it does, it thrives |
לֹא כֵן הָרְשָׁעִים
כִּי אִם כַּמֹּץ אֲשֶׁר תִּדְּפֶנּוּ רוּחַ | 4 | Not so the-many wicked in contrast: like chaff that wind blows |
עַל כֵּן לֹא יָקֻמוּ
רְשָׁעִים בַּמִּשְׁפָּט וְחַטָּאִים בַּעֲדַת צַדִּיקִים | 5 | So it is that they will not arise the wicked in the judgment nor sinners in the assembly of the-many righteous |
כִּי יוֹדֵעַ יְהוָה
דֶּרֶךְ צַדִּיקִים וְדֶרֶךְ רְשָׁעִים תֹּאבֵד | 6 | For יְהוָה knows the way of those righteous but the way of those wicked will perish |
Selected recurring words in relative order
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 1 | 2 | Vs | Root |
* אשׁרי happy
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* אשׁר who
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* לא does not
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* רשׁעים the wicked
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| 1 | רשׁע | |||||||||||
* ובדרך and in the way of
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| 1 | דרך | |||||||||||
* חטאים sinners
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* לא does not
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| 1 | לא | |||||||||||
* ובמושׁב and in the seat of
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| 1 | ישׁב | |||||||||||
* לא does not
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* ישׁב sit
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כי in
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* אם contrast
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* בתורת in the instruction of
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* יהוה יהוה
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* ובתורתו and in his instruction
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* אשׁר that
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* לא does not
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* אשׁר that
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* לא not
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* כן so
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* הרשׁעים the-many wicked
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כי in
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* אם contrast
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* אשׁר that
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* כן so it is that
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* לא they will not
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* רשׁעים the wicked
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* וחטאים nor sinners
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* צדיקים the-many righteous
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כי for
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* יהוה יהוה
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* דרך the way of
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* צדיקים those righteous
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* ודרך but the way of
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* רשׁעים those wicked
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Here are some shapes and features to look for in these tables:
Check to see if all verses are present. A missing verse number shows that the words of the verse occur only once in the psalm. This may be a central message. In Psalm 1, there are no verses missing.
Check to see what the last recurring word in the passage is. This may form a focal point for the text. In Psalm 1, the final recurring word is righteous.
When you see a shape like an arrowhead, it indicates that a set of words is used in reverse order. If you drew circles or arcs joining these words to each other in the text, you would see they are concentric. If you look at what these circles surround, you may find a particular theme or focus of the psalm. In Psalm 1, wicked -- way -- sinners are such a group. Contrast the miniature table showing only verses 1, 5, 6 with the full table for Psalm 1). Note how they reappear at the end of the table in reverse order from the beginning. Almost every psalm has such a frame, often comprised of more than one word. Sometimes two consecutive psalms will have a single frame.
When you see a shape like parallel lines (like that -- not), this indicates that the recurring words occur in the same order. If you drew the circles, they would intersect. And you might find that the content is outlined with some emphasis by the feature. So in this case, the action of verse 3 is contrasted with the actions of verse 1. And the two words, that and not, surround the image of a fruitful tree.
When you see a vertical line of recurring words in the table, this indicates a word that recurs frequently. This may indicate a theme for the psalm or a word linking sections of the psalm. The example of no in Psalm 1 is typical. It will happen again in Psalm 15. A series of 18 such repetitions may be seen in Psalm 145. This is contrasted again by the that -- not of verses 4 and 5 which surround the scattering of the chaff by the wind.
Note: in order to keep the tables from getting too large, I have often but not always excluded the following words to reduce the volume of potentially non-significant structures. על(`l) preposition on, above, יהוה (yhvh), the tetragrammeton, אלוה ('lvh) God, usually plural, כי (ky) a very common conjunction meaning for or because, אל ('l) God or a negative (and many other possibilities but rare in the psalms), את ('t) the object marker, a word not usually translated. If any of these is significant in a poem, it will be noted. These 6 roots out of 1410 distinct combinations in the Psalter (<0.5%) account for more than 2,400 of the 19,584 words (>12.3%) of the Hebrew text.
Check to see if all verses are present. A missing verse number shows that the words of the verse occur only once in the psalm. This may be a central message. In Psalm 1, there are no verses missing.
Check to see what the last recurring word in the passage is. This may form a focal point for the text. In Psalm 1, the final recurring word is righteous.
When you see a shape like an arrowhead, it indicates that a set of words is used in reverse order. If you drew circles or arcs joining these words to each other in the text, you would see they are concentric. If you look at what these circles surround, you may find a particular theme or focus of the psalm. In Psalm 1, wicked -- way -- sinners are such a group. Contrast the miniature table showing only verses 1, 5, 6 with the full table for Psalm 1). Note how they reappear at the end of the table in reverse order from the beginning. Almost every psalm has such a frame, often comprised of more than one word. Sometimes two consecutive psalms will have a single frame.
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | Vs | Root |
* רשׁעים the wicked
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* ובדרך and in the way of
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| 1 | דרך | ||
* חטאים sinners
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| 1 | חטא | ||
* וחטאים nor sinners
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| 5 | חטא | ||
* ודרך but the way of
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| 6 | דרך | ||
* רשׁעים those wicked
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| 6 | רשׁע |
When you see a shape like parallel lines (like that -- not), this indicates that the recurring words occur in the same order. If you drew the circles, they would intersect. And you might find that the content is outlined with some emphasis by the feature. So in this case, the action of verse 3 is contrasted with the actions of verse 1. And the two words, that and not, surround the image of a fruitful tree.
When you see a vertical line of recurring words in the table, this indicates a word that recurs frequently. This may indicate a theme for the psalm or a word linking sections of the psalm. The example of no in Psalm 1 is typical. It will happen again in Psalm 15. A series of 18 such repetitions may be seen in Psalm 145. This is contrasted again by the that -- not of verses 4 and 5 which surround the scattering of the chaff by the wind.
Note: in order to keep the tables from getting too large, I have often but not always excluded the following words to reduce the volume of potentially non-significant structures. על(`l) preposition on, above, יהוה (yhvh), the tetragrammeton, אלוה ('lvh) God, usually plural, כי (ky) a very common conjunction meaning for or because, אל ('l) God or a negative (and many other possibilities but rare in the psalms), את ('t) the object marker, a word not usually translated. If any of these is significant in a poem, it will be noted. These 6 roots out of 1410 distinct combinations in the Psalter (<0.5%) account for more than 2,400 of the 19,584 words (>12.3%) of the Hebrew text.
Notes by verse
2 | in contrast, כִּי אִם (ky 'im) preserving the unique combination of כִּי אִם (see also Jeremiah 7, Deuteronomy 12, Esther 2.) Thanks for the suggestion from Boaz Shoshan, Ben Gurion University of the Negev to bring more contrast into my first rendering 'in this case'. instruction, (תורה) Torah, or teaching, mentoring, but not Law in a legal sense The tetragrammeton, (four letters יְהוָה YHVH, the Name revealed to Moses) is reproduced in Hebrew without transliteration. In your reading, substitute whatever name is in your tradition, such as Adonai, or Hashem (the Name), or LORD, or Yahweh as you desire. mutter, הגה (hgh), reading to himself out loud, perhaps murmur or muse, meditate. Murmur המה (hmh) I have used later for its negative tone, so I cannot use it here. |
3 | that one, emphasizing the singular without the personal pronoun [Revelation 22:2] |
4 | the-many, drawing attention to the singular-plural contrast in this psalm which sets the tone for the incorporation of the elect singular and plural |
5 | so it is, therefore, but hear the similar sound of not so. |
6 | the way, specific by implication with the aforementioned many wicked or righteous |
Hebrew words: 67
English words: 136
Percentage of Hebrew words that recur in this psalm: 55%
Average keywords per verse: 6.2
English words: 136
Percentage of Hebrew words that recur in this psalm: 55%
Average keywords per verse: 6.2
Psalm 1
Translation and Notes last updated on 2011.11.14-12:08
Text added 2012.07.17 - illustrating the difficulties of doing this in English without an apparatus.
Text added 2012.07.17 - illustrating the difficulties of doing this in English without an apparatus.
If you are reading and searching for frames in English, two things will become apparent.
Some words that recur in Hebrew will not show in English. In all these cases, for the verses that are included, the recurrence tables (based on Hebrew and showing English also) will show the pattern clearly.
a. Relative pronouns, who, that, are different in English but the same in Hebrew.
b. Homonyms in Hebrew will translate to different glosses in English. These may be significant in the Hebrew aural structure (assonance and word-play).
c. Synonyms in English may translate the same Hebrew word with different English glosses. I have minimized this in my own translations.
d. Different Hebrew verb forms may translate to different English glosses.
Some words will recur in English that do not recur in Hebrew. When working in English, check your reading of recurring words against the recurrence tables. Usually it will be clear why some words are or are not part of the internal structure of the poem.
a. In the example from Psalm 1 verses 5 and 6 above, those recurs in English because I have translated using that word to emphasize the plural form of the Hebrew for righteous and wicked in contrast to the singular in verse 1.
b. English helping verbs like do, have, make, that are part of the Hebrew verb are separate words in English.
c. To be or to become may be present or not in Hebrew but may be required in English.
d. Homonyms in English may arise from different Hebrew words, but this is rare.
e. Recurrence between psalms may require an echo that compromises similar sounding glosses in the current psalm.
f. Prepositions and conjunctions will vary in translation depending on context and verbs.
g. Prepositions and pronouns may show as separate words in English but are not separate in the Hebrew word.
h. Two words may be required in English to distinguish differing Hebrew words. For example, verb + preposition: bring up, bring down represent separate Hebrew verbs; or adjective + noun: burning anger, burning coals; or verb + noun: sing, sing a psalm. You can usually see this if you look left and count the words in the Hebrew.
i. Sometimes I have allowed similar sounding words (like righteous and righteousness) to stand separately.
Wednesday, 9 November 2011
BBC Radio Evensong - live
This will be a podcast - repeats Sunday after noon. It is my daughter Sarah conducting the Ely Cathedral Choir.
Two hour review of the first 10 psalms
With some judicious questions and criticisms, CSRS Visiting Research Fellow, Bill Morrow helped me make a necessary course correction. He suggested from my answers to the question - why are you doing this - that I have conflicting motives striving for primacy. One solid one is enough. I now know what I must focus on in any comments I make on the psalms. I am looking first at recurrence patterns. I am not a commentator. I expect my translations to stand, but his review of the first 10 psalms pointed out some skills I need to hone to make the translations as precise as possible so that they reflect the focus I am suggesting. I will continue to report the odd experiment, but I don't expect to blog much except for the scheduled posts at the other blog. They are like the carrot pulling the donkey forward to carry the cart. That post on Psalm 98 is cool - it shows how 97-98 are framed as a single poem.
I am most grateful to Bill. A good teacher is a special gift. I didn't go to school to learn this stuff. Instead I spent 40 years in the database world - a skill I am using to pursue my research into the text. That's what I will eventually report. I am of course also grateful to many who share their knowledge through blogging on the Hebrew Bible.
I am most grateful to Bill. A good teacher is a special gift. I didn't go to school to learn this stuff. Instead I spent 40 years in the database world - a skill I am using to pursue my research into the text. That's what I will eventually report. I am of course also grateful to many who share their knowledge through blogging on the Hebrew Bible.
Sunday, 6 November 2011
Psalm 86 - a model for prayer and poetry
This psalm is a meditation on Exodus 34:6, among many in the TNK. Here is a snippet of the work I am working on. I would be delighted in some thoughtful feedback. [later] I have now had an oral review of psalms 1-10 this week, this Tuesday, with Bill Morrow of Queen's University, on sabbatical here during my own community fellowship at UVic.
Psalm 86 divides nicely into 4 sections, 1-4, 5-8, 9-12, 13-17. The overall table is 24 keywords wide and therefore difficult to see. The division by 2 gives tables of 13 keywords wide each as shown below. Verses 5 and 15 identify two other roots that recur twice only in the poem and are therefore missed in the tables when taken 8 verses at a time. It is a good exercise to find the words that make each of the 4 sections cohere in themselves. Yet these sections are also tightly bound together to each other. Altogether this is a model poem.
Notice too (from the tables) how verses 1-3 lay out the words that the poet will reuse in verses 4 to 8. Also verses 9-11 layout the words that are used in the remaining verses. Groups of these words are clearly reused in reverse order. Apart from any errors I have made, (and I have corrected a few in the last two days) the analysis of such recurrence patterns is a fully objective exercise. These give a frame in which the more subjective parallelism and prosody tools can be applied.
Psalm 86 divides nicely into 4 sections, 1-4, 5-8, 9-12, 13-17. The overall table is 24 keywords wide and therefore difficult to see. The division by 2 gives tables of 13 keywords wide each as shown below. Verses 5 and 15 identify two other roots that recur twice only in the poem and are therefore missed in the tables when taken 8 verses at a time. It is a good exercise to find the words that make each of the 4 sections cohere in themselves. Yet these sections are also tightly bound together to each other. Altogether this is a model poem.
Notice too (from the tables) how verses 1-3 lay out the words that the poet will reuse in verses 4 to 8. Also verses 9-11 layout the words that are used in the remaining verses. Groups of these words are clearly reused in reverse order. Apart from any errors I have made, (and I have corrected a few in the last two days) the analysis of such recurrence patterns is a fully objective exercise. These give a frame in which the more subjective parallelism and prosody tools can be applied.
תְּפִלָּה לְדָוִד
הַטֵּה יְהוָה אָזְנְךָ עֲנֵנִי כִּי עָנִי וְאֶבְיוֹן אָנִי | 1 | A prayer Of David Stretch יְהוָה your ear answer me for I am afflicted and in need am I |
שָׁמְרָה נַפְשִׁי
כִּי חָסִיד אָנִי הוֹשַׁע עַבְדְּךָ אַתָּה אֱלֹהַי הַבּוֹטֵחַ אֵלֶיךָ | 2 | Guard my being for under mercy am I save your servant you, my God the one trusting in you |
חָנֵּנִי אֲדֹנָי
כִּי אֵלֶיךָ אֶקְרָא כָּל הַיּוֹם | 3 | be gracious to me, O Lord for to you I call every day |
שַׂמֵּחַ נֶפֶשׁ עַבְדֶּךָ
כִּי אֵלֶיךָ אֲדֹנָי נַפְשִׁי אֶשָּׂא | 4 | Make glad the being of your servant for to you O Lord my being I lift up |
כִּי אַתָּה אֲדֹנָי טוֹב
וְסַלָּח וְרַב חֶסֶד לְכָל קֹרְאֶיךָ | 5 | for you, O Lord, are good and forgiving and full of kindness to all calling on you |
הַאֲזִינָה יְהוָה תְּפִלָּתִי
וְהַקְשִׁיבָה בְּקוֹל תַּחֲנוּנוֹתָי | 6 | Give ear יְהוָה to my prayer and attend with the voice of my supplication |
בְּיוֹם צָרָתִי אֶקְרָאֶךָּ
כִּי תַעֲנֵנִי | 7 | In the day of my straits I will call on you for you will answer me |
אֵין כָּמוֹךָ בָאֱלֹהִים
אֲדֹנָי וְאֵין כְּמַעֲשֶׂיךָ | 8 | there is none like you among the gods O Lord, and there is nothing like your doings |
כָּל גּוֹיִם אֲשֶׁר עָשִׂיתָ יָבוֹאוּ
וְיִשְׁתַּחֲווּ לְפָנֶיךָ אֲדֹנָי וִיכַבְּדוּ לִשְׁמֶךָ | 9 | All nations whom you made will come and worship in your presence, O Lord and glorify your name |
כִּי גָדוֹל אַתָּה
וְעֹשֵׂה נִפְלָאוֹת אַתָּה אֱלֹהִים לְבַדֶּךָ | 10 | for you are great and do wonders you O God, you alone |
הוֹרֵנִי יְהוָה דַּרְכֶּךָ
אֲהַלֵּךְ בַּאֲמִתֶּךָ יַחֵד לְבָבִי לְיִרְאָה שְׁמֶךָ | 11 | Instruct me יְהוָה your way I will walk in your truth make one my heart to fear your name |
אוֹדְךָ אֲדֹנָי אֱלֹהַי
בְּכָל לְבָבִי וַאֲכַבְּדָה שִׁמְךָ לְעוֹלָם | 12 | I will thank you, O Lord my God with all my heart and I will glorify your name forever |
כִּי חַסְדְּךָ גָּדוֹל עָלָי
וְהִצַּלְתָּ נַפְשִׁי מִשְּׁאוֹל תַּחְתִּיָּה | 13 | for your kindness is great to me and you have delivered my being from Sheol's nether parts |
אֱלֹהִים זֵדִים קָמוּ עָלַי
וַעֲדַת עָרִיצִים בִּקְשׁוּ נַפְשִׁי וְלֹא שָׂמוּךָ לְנֶגְדָּם | 14 | O God the presumptuous rise up against me and an assembly of the ruthless demand my being and not do they set you before them |
וְאַתָּה אֲדֹנָי אֵל
רַחוּם וְחַנּוּן אֶרֶךְ אַפַּיִם וְרַב חֶסֶד וֶאֱמֶת | 15 | but you O Lord God are compassionate and gracious slow to anger and full of kindness and truth |
פְּנֵה אֵלַי וְחָנֵּנִי
תְּנָה עֻזְּךָ לְעַבְדֶּךָ וְהוֹשִׁיעָה לְבֶן אֲמָתֶךָ | 16 | be present to me and be gracious to me give your strength to your servant and salvation to the child of your maidservant |
עֲשֵׂה עִמִּי אוֹת לְטוֹבָה
וְיִרְאוּ שֹׂנְאַי וְיֵבֹשׁוּ כִּי אַתָּה יְהוָה עֲזַרְתַּנִי וְנִחַמְתָּנִי | 17 | make for me a sign of good and those hating me will see and be ashamed for you יְהוָה have helped me and comforted me |
Notes by verse
2 | under mercy, חסיד, the singular one under the חסד, that covenant mercy and kindness of יְהוָה |
5 | forgiving סלח (slx) forgive, pardon, used 4 times in the Psalter, different from 'lift up' |
9 | [Revelation 15:4] |
16 | maidservant, אמה ('mh) easily misread as truth, אמת ('mt) |
Selected recurring words in relative order (1 to 8)
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 1 | 2 | 3 | Vs | Root |
תפלה a prayer
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אזנך your ear
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ענני and answer me
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עני afflicted
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אני am I
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נפשׁי my being
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אני am I
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עבדך your servant
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אתה you
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חנני be gracious to me
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אדני O Lord
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אקרא I call
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כל every
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היום day
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נפשׁ the being of
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עבדך your servant
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אדני O Lord
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נפשׁי my being
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אתה you
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אדני O Lord
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לכל to all
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קראיך calling on you
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האזינה give ear
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תפלתי to my prayer
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תחנונותי my supplication
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ביום in the day of
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אקראך I will call on you
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תענני you will answer me
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אין there is none
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אדני O Lord
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ואין and there is nothing
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Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | 10 | 1 | 2 | 3 | Vs | Root |
כל all
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עשׂית you made
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לפניך in your presence
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אדני O Lord
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ויכבדו and glorify
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לשׁמך your name
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גדול great
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אתה you are
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ועשׂה and do
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אתה you
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באמתך in your truth
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לבבי my heart
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שׁמך your name
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בכל with all
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לבבי my heart
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ואכבדה and I will glorify
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שׁמך your name
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חסדך your kindness
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גדול is great
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נפשׁי my being
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נפשׁי my being
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ואתה but you
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אדני O Lord
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וחנון and gracious
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חסד kindness
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ואמת and truth
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פנה be present
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וחנני and be gracious to me
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עשׂה make
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אתה you
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Seven occurrences of Lord (אדני), six occurrences of you (אתה), and five occurrences of being (נפשׁ) are the backbone of this psalm. Save, and servant form two concentric circles between verses 2 and 16. The central verse 9 recalls the worship of all nations from Psalm 22.
All nations whom you made will come
and worship in your presence, O Lord
and glorify your name
and worship in your presence, O Lord
and glorify your name
Saturday, 5 November 2011
Children of dust
For the record, I have abandoned the rendering of בְּנֵי אָדָם as children of dust. There were several conflicts against my rule of concordance. Also I had to be more serious in a few places. I am not generally updating my translations and notes on this blog any more, but for this one, I have done it and will eventually republish the stand-alone pages that contain glossary etc. I have decided generally to use 'children of humanity' or 'human child' depending on the plurality. In a few places where there is some irony or criticism, I have used 'earthling', or 'humus'. I have now removed the conflict with עָפָר. It was quite a serious conflict, e.g. compare these verses
and
similar thoughts in different words. It would not do to have used the same word 'dust' in English.
O dear - I am becoming serious.
תַּסְתִּיר פָּנֶיךָ יִבָּהֵלוּן תֹּסֵף רוּחָם יִגְוָעוּן וְאֶל עֲפָרָם יְשׁוּבוּן | 104.29 | you hide your face they are vexed you gather their spirit they expire and to their dust they return |
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תֵּצֵא רוּחוֹ יָשֻׁב לְאַדְמָתוֹ בַּיּוֹם הַהוּא אָבְדוּ עֶשְׁתֹּנֹתָיו | 146.4 | its spirit goes forth it returns to its humus In that day its gleams perish |
similar thoughts in different words. It would not do to have used the same word 'dust' in English.
O dear - I am becoming serious.
Friday, 4 November 2011
Working on Psalm 71
I've been busy - so busy my blog doesn't even show up on my list of most frequently used pages!
If you can take time to read the following, I think you might agree that using recurrence as a means of deciding the higher level subdivisions of a longish psalm is helpful. Smaller tables make it very easy to see the patterns. Verses 8-15 are a surprise to me but I suspect that for the long psalms I will see more of these patterns if I persevere in using the measuring rod I have. And I think it is likely that I am also seeing the inner workings of the poetic mind of 2500 years ago. So scan the psalm and glance at the patterns in the tables that follow.
Ashamed and your righteousness frame the poem as a whole. The content of the poem divides into 4 groups.
Verses 1-7: the poet expresses confidence to יְהוָה - this section is framed by refuge
Verses 8-15: framed by mouth and praise
Verses 16-18: framed by come and valour
Verses 19-24: framed by righteousness
Personally, I think recurrence is more objective than either parallelism or prosody in determining larger structures. For the tools see here. [This post is a curious mixture of the old and the new. My old approach to prosody did not use the music as much as it does now. 2021]
If you can take time to read the following, I think you might agree that using recurrence as a means of deciding the higher level subdivisions of a longish psalm is helpful. Smaller tables make it very easy to see the patterns. Verses 8-15 are a surprise to me but I suspect that for the long psalms I will see more of these patterns if I persevere in using the measuring rod I have. And I think it is likely that I am also seeing the inner workings of the poetic mind of 2500 years ago. So scan the psalm and glance at the patterns in the tables that follow.
Ashamed and your righteousness frame the poem as a whole. The content of the poem divides into 4 groups.
Verses 1-7: the poet expresses confidence to יְהוָה - this section is framed by refuge
Verses 8-15: framed by mouth and praise
Verses 16-18: framed by come and valour
Verses 19-24: framed by righteousness
Personally, I think recurrence is more objective than either parallelism or prosody in determining larger structures. For the tools see here. [This post is a curious mixture of the old and the new. My old approach to prosody did not use the music as much as it does now. 2021]
Psalm 71 - the declarations of youth and age [Updated March 24,2021]
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בְּךָֽ־יְהוָ֥ה חָסִ֑יתִי אַל־אֵב֥וֹשָׁה לְעוֹלָֽם | 1 In you Yahweh I take refuge. I will never be ashamed. | 3e | 4A | 8 7 |
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בְּצִדְקָתְךָ֗ תַּצִּילֵ֥נִי וּֽתְפַלְּטֵ֑נִי הַטֵּֽה־אֵלַ֥י אָ֝זְנְךָ֗ וְהוֹשִׁיעֵֽנִי | 2 In your righteousness you will deliver me and you will secure me. Bend to me your ear and save me. | 3e | 4A | 12 12 |
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הֱיֵ֤ה לִ֨י ׀ לְצ֥וּר מָע֡וֹן לָב֗וֹא תָּמִ֗יד צִוִּ֥יתָ לְהוֹשִׁיעֵ֑נִי כִּֽי־סַלְעִ֖י וּמְצוּדָתִ֣י אָֽתָּה | 3 Be to me a rock, a habitation to come to continually. You have commanded that I be saved, for my cliff and my fortress you are. | 3e | 4C | 19 9 |
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אֱֽלֹהַ֗י פַּ֭לְּטֵנִי מִיַּ֣ד רָשָׁ֑ע מִכַּ֖ף מְעַוֵּ֣ל וְחוֹמֵץ | 4 O my God, secure me from the hand of the wicked, from the palm, from an unjust and sour person. | 3e | 4B | 9 8 |
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כִּֽי־אַתָּ֥ה תִקְוָתִ֑י אֲדֹנָ֥י יְ֝הוִ֗ה מִבְטַחִ֥י מִנְּעוּרָֽי | 5 For you I wait, O Lord Yahweh, from my trust, from my youth. | 3e | 4A | 5 11 |
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עָלֶ֤יךָ ׀ נִסְמַ֬כְתִּי מִבֶּ֗טֶן מִמְּעֵ֣י אִ֭מִּי אַתָּ֣ה גוֹזִ֑י בְּךָ֖ תְהִלָּתִ֣י תָמִֽיד | 6 By you I have been supported from the belly. From the inner parts of my mother you yourself severed me. In you is my praise continually. | 3e | 4C | 17 8 |
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כְּ֭מוֹפֵת הָיִ֣יתִי לְרַבִּ֑ים וְ֝אַתָּ֗ה מַֽחֲסִי־עֹֽז | 7 I have become as a portent to many, but you are my strong refuge. | g | 3e | 4B | 9 7 |
יִמָּ֣לֵא פִ֭י תְּהִלָּתֶ֑ךָ כָּל־הַ֝יּ֗וֹם תִּפְאַרְתֶּֽךָ | 8 Let my mouth be filled with your praise, all the day long your adornment. | 3e | 4B | 9 7 |
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אַֽל־תַּ֭שְׁלִיכֵנִי לְעֵ֣ת זִקְנָ֑ה כִּכְל֥וֹת כֹּ֝חִ֗י אַֽל־תַּעַזְבֵֽנִי | 9 Do not cast me off in the time of old age, when my power is consumed, do not forsake me. | 3e | 4B | 9 9 |
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כִּֽי־אָמְר֣וּ אוֹיְבַ֣י לִ֑י וְשֹׁמְרֵ֥י נַ֝פְשִׁ֗י נוֹעֲצ֥וּ יַחְדָּֽו | 10 For my enemies talk of me, and watching for my being, they conspire as one. | 3e | 4B | 6 10 |
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לֵ֭אמֹר אֱלֹהִ֣ים עֲזָב֑וֹ רִֽדְפ֥וּ וְ֝תִפְשׂ֗וּהוּ כִּי־אֵ֥ין מַצִּֽיל | 11 Saying, God has forsaken him. Pursue him and arrest him, for there is none to deliver. | g | 3e | 4B | 8 10 |
אֱ֭לֹהִים אַל־תִּרְחַ֣ק מִמֶּ֑נִּי אֱ֝לֹהַ֗י לְעֶזְרָ֥תִי חֽוּשָׁה | 12 O God do not be distant from me, My God to my help hurry. | g | 3e | 4B | 9 9 |
יֵבֹ֣שׁוּ יִכְלוּ֮ שֹׂטְנֵ֪י נַ֫פְשִׁ֥י יַֽעֲט֣וּ חֶ֭רְפָּה וּכְלִמָּ֑ה מְ֝בַקְשֵׁ֗י רָעָתִֽי | 13 Let the accusers of my being be ashamed and consumed, let them wrap themselves with reproach and humiliation, who seek my hurt. | 3d | 4B | 9 8 6 |
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וַ֭אֲנִי תָּמִ֣יד אֲיַחֵ֑ל וְ֝הוֹסַפְתִּ֗י עַל־כָּל־תְּהִלָּתֶֽךָ | 14 but I continually will hope, and I will repeatedly add to all your praises. | g | 3e | 4B | 8 11 |
פִּ֤י ׀ יְסַפֵּ֬ר צִדְקָתֶ֗ךָ כָּל־הַיּ֥וֹם תְּשׁוּעָתֶ֑ךָ כִּ֤י לֹ֖א יָדַ֣עְתִּי סְפֹרֽוֹת | 15 my mouth will recount your righteousness, all the day long your salvation, for I do not know the counts. | C | 3e | 4C | 16 8 |
אָב֗וֹא בִּ֭גְבֻרוֹת אֲדֹנָ֣י יְהוִ֑ה אַזְכִּ֖יר צִדְקָתְךָ֣ לְבַדֶּֽךָ | 16 I will come in valour, O Lord, Yahweh. I will remember your righteousness, yours alone. | 3e | 4B | 10 9 |
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אֱֽלֹהִ֗ים לִמַּדְתַּ֥נִי מִנְּעוּרָ֑י וְעַד־הֵ֝֗נָּה אַגִּ֥יד נִפְלְאוֹתֶֽיךָ | 17 O God, you have taught me from my youth, and till now I have announced your wonderful works. | 3e | 4A | 9 11 |
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וְגַ֤ם עַד־זִקְנָ֨ה ׀ וְשֵׂיבָה֮ אֱלֹהִ֪ים אַֽל־תַּעַ֫זְבֵ֥נִי עַד־אַגִּ֣יד זְרוֹעֲךָ֣ לְד֑וֹר לְכָל־יָ֝ב֗וֹא גְּבוּרָתֶֽךָ | 18 And even to old age and grey-hair, O God do not forsake me, till I have announced your arm to a generation, to all who come, your valour. | 3d | 4C | 16 9 9 |
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וְצִדְקָתְךָ֥ אֱלֹהִ֗ים עַד־מָ֫ר֥וֹם אֲשֶׁר־עָשִׂ֥יתָ גְדֹל֑וֹת אֱ֝לֹהִ֗ים מִ֣י כָמֽוֹךָ | 19 And your righteousness O God is ever high, who has done great things. O God, who is like you? | 3e | 4B | 10 8 7 |
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אֲשֶׁ֤ר הִרְאִיתַ֨נִי ׀ צָר֥וֹת רַבּ֗וֹת וְרָ֫ע֥וֹת תָּשׁ֥וּב תְּחַיֵּ֑ינִי וּֽמִתְּהֹמ֥וֹת הָ֝אָ֗רֶץ תָּשׁ֥וּב תַּעֲלֵֽנִי | 20 Who showed me many and hurtful troubles, you will turn and give me life, and from the abysses of the earth, you will turn and make me ascend. | 3e | 4C | 13 6 13 |
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תֶּ֤רֶב ׀ גְּֽדֻלָּתִ֗י וְתִסֹּ֥ב תְּֽנַחֲמֵֽנִי | 21 You will increase my greatness and you will surround and comfort me. | C | 3e | 4C | 14 |
גַּם־אֲנִ֤י ׀ אוֹדְךָ֣ בִכְלִי־נֶבֶל֮ אֲמִתְּךָ֪ אֱלֹ֫הָ֥י אֲזַמְּרָ֣ה לְךָ֣ בְכִנּ֑וֹר קְ֝ד֗וֹשׁ יִשְׂרָאֵֽל | 22 Even I, I will give thanks to you in this senseless instrument, your truth O my God. I will sing a psalm to you on a harp, the Holy One of Israel. | 3d | 4C | 14 8 5 |
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תְּרַנֵּ֣נָּ֣ה שְׂ֭פָתַי כִּ֣י אֲזַמְּרָה־לָּ֑ךְ וְ֝נַפְשִׁ֗י אֲשֶׁ֣ר פָּדִֽיתָ | 23 My lips will shout for joy for I will sing a psalm to you, and my being which you have ransomed. | 3e | 4B | 12 8 |
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גַּם־לְשׁוֹנִ֗י כָּל־הַ֭יּוֹם תֶּהְגֶּ֣ה צִדְקָתֶ֑ךָ כִּי־בֹ֥שׁוּ כִֽי־חָ֝פְר֗וּ מְבַקְשֵׁ֥י רָעָתִֽי | 24 Even my tongue all the day long will meditate on your righteousness, for they are shamed, for they are disappointed who seek my hurt. | 3e | 4B | 13 11 |
Notes by verse
4 | the repeated from (mem) in verses 4 to 6 is accurate as to sound and structure. |
16 | I have chosen words related to valiant, valour, and prevail for all words with the root גבר |
22 | skin נבל (nbl) as instrument,I chose lute (also could be guitar, psaltery, etc), but here it seems like a joke, meaning the foolishness of the not senseless (נבל) skin of the poet, i.e. the instrument that is the body itself. |
Selected recurring words (1-7)
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | Vs | Root |
בך in you | ░ | 1 | בך | ||||||
חסיתי I take refuge | ░ | 1 | חסה | ||||||
ותפלטני and you will secure me | ░ | 2 | פלט | ||||||
והושׁיעני and save me | ░ | 2 | ישׁע | ||||||
היה be | ░ | 3 | היה | ||||||
תמיד continually | ░ | 3 | תמיד | ||||||
להושׁיעני that I be saved | ░ | 3 | ישׁע | ||||||
אתה you are | ░ | 3 | אתה | ||||||
פלטני secure me | ░ | 4 | פלט | ||||||
אתה you are | ░ | 5 | אתה | ||||||
אתה you yourself | ░ | 6 | אתה | ||||||
בך in you | ░ | 6 | בך | ||||||
תמיד continually | ░ | 6 | תמיד | ||||||
הייתי I have become | ░ | 7 | היה | ||||||
ואתה for you | ░ | 7 | אתה | ||||||
מחסי are my refuge | ░ | 7 | חסה |
Selected recurring words (8-15)
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | 9 | Vs | Root |
פי my mouth | ░ | 8 | פה | ||||||||
תהלתך your praise | ░ | 8 | הלל | ||||||||
כל every | ░ | 8 | כל | ||||||||
היום day | ░ | 8 | יום | ||||||||
ככלות when is consumed | ░ | 9 | כלה | ||||||||
תעזבני do forsake be | ░ | 9 | עזב | ||||||||
אמרו say | ░ | 10 | אמר | ||||||||
נפשׁי my being | ░ | 10 | נפשׁ | ||||||||
לאמר saying | ░ | 11 | אמר | ||||||||
עזבו has forsaken him | ░ | 11 | עזב | ||||||||
יכלו and consumed | ░ | 13 | כלה | ||||||||
נפשׁי my being | ░ | 13 | נפשׁ | ||||||||
כל all | ░ | 14 | כל | ||||||||
תהלתך your praises | ░ | 14 | הלל | ||||||||
פי my mouth | ░ | 15 | פה | ||||||||
יספר will recount | ░ | 15 | ספר | ||||||||
כל every | ░ | 15 | כל | ||||||||
היום day | ░ | 15 | יום | ||||||||
ספרות the counts | ░ | 15 | ספר |
Selected recurring words (16-18)
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | Vs | Root |
אבוא I will go | ░ | 16 | בוא | |||
בגברות in valour | ░ | 16 | גבר | |||
ועד and till | ░ | 17 | עד | |||
אגיד I have announced | ░ | 17 | נגד | |||
עד to | ░ | 18 | עד | |||
עד till | ░ | 18 | עד | |||
אגיד I have announced | ░ | 18 | נגד | |||
יבוא who come | ░ | 18 | בוא | |||
גבורתך your valour | ░ | 18 | גבר |
Selected recurring words (19-24)
Word and gloss * first usage | 1 | 2 | 3 | 4 | 5 | 6 | 7 | 8 | Vs | Root |
וצדקתך and your righteousness | ░ | 19 | צדק | |||||||
אשׁר who | ░ | 19 | אשׁר | |||||||
גדלות great things | ░ | 19 | גדל | |||||||
אשׁר who | ░ | 20 | אשׁר | |||||||
ורעות and evil | ░ | 20 | רע | |||||||
תשׁוב you will turn | ░ | 20 | שׁוב | |||||||
תשׁוב you will turn | ░ | 20 | שׁוב | |||||||
גדלתי my greatness | ░ | 21 | גדל | |||||||
גם also | ░ | 22 | גם | |||||||
אזמרה I will sing a psalm | ░ | 22 | זמר | |||||||
לך to you | ░ | 22 | לך | |||||||
אזמרה I will sing a psalm | ░ | 23 | זמר | |||||||
לך to you | ░ | 23 | לך | |||||||
אשׁר which | ░ | 23 | אשׁר | |||||||
גם even | ░ | 24 | גם | |||||||
צדקתך your righteousness | ░ | 24 | צדק | |||||||
רעתי my hurt | ░ | 24 | רע |